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Automaton by ~Bryianzum:iconBryianzum:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Ballad

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This is my favorite thing that I have written, so I'm adding personal analysis and linking it to my inversely themed poem, Hominoid.

: Personal Analysis :

This piece is about an android that only has a basic grasp of emotion. The android cannot feel or understand the love of these two people, and this makes it sad, turning it's vision blue, which it also does not understand. It realizes that, though it's thought processes are superior, it cannot compete existentially.

::Update 9-24-05::

I finally have a version of the recording that I'm totally happy with, and better yet, it's available online so my readers can appropriately hear, visualize, and read the poem. The file is available via the poem. Enjoy.

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~darkvenom Feb 5, 2004, 2:04:02 AM
niiiiiice. nuff sed really
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~mysterious-lass Feb 5, 2004, 6:20:47 AM
:clap: Wonderful! What a good perspective you have!

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:butterflytwo:Identify your patients/~|*|~\XY configurations:butterflytwo:
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~Bryianzum Feb 5, 2004, 9:08:43 AM
Thank you so much! I like to think I'm a little 'off'. I hope you agree. :D
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~glitchphil Feb 5, 2004, 11:28:35 AM
It was pretty damn good. Interesting perspective, but yah it seemed a little " off" from your typical work that I have seen.

Maybe you trying to hard to make rhymes? As good as they were? lol

Hasta

-Phil!
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~destinedDESIRE Feb 5, 2004, 12:48:29 PM
I LOVE IT!!!!!!
So much so im going to FAV it :)
Great pic, btw.. who are they?
Though the pic wasnt intented for this piece I think You have worked it in brilliantly -applauds-
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~ihatebeisbol Feb 5, 2004, 12:48:32 PM
hmm... reminds me of my "robot love" picture... interesting ideas you have, and that picture! when i sit back and look at it, it looks 3d to me. crazy....

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I'm rubber. You're glue. Whoever you are bounces off of me and sticks to you.
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~Bryianzum Feb 5, 2004, 1:31:08 PM
Yeah, the piece was intended for the picture :D. But the picture is me and a girl I know on top of a mountain in Pennsylvania.
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!inziladun Feb 7, 2004, 11:18:35 AM
Omg this is another fantastic poem!! :jawdrop: Really cool couplets, really perfect; you've managed to maintain the flow of the 'story' or of this little study and still introduce new, versatile word combinations which fit really well. :nod:
I love the idea of this too, machines looking at humans; and it's definately ironic in one sense at least, because machines obviously do not have emotions. :D

My two favourite couplets I think are To know that they will devise their own end
Almost brings feelings my circuits transcend
and
The existence of happiness and the pursuit thereof
Automaton, I’ll never grasp the concept of love , even though the beat is a little inconsistent. :clap:

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but, mainly, Stay Classy
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