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Temptress In Obscurity by ~Bryianzum:iconBryianzum:





What of her face?
Her insensitive hair of earthly red talks to the wind.
And her throat advocates deep shades of green and brown;
she sings the most somber Radiohead songs.
(She has substance)
Her careless yellowed arms elegantly carry her backwards
through the latest holocaust.
The fabricated pale broach that adorns her chest
is her only possessive feature.
When she stops to hear that golden heart beat extravagant melodies,
my footsteps will recede into hers…
Manipulating violent violet, she’s not leaving until her stomach
is free from lingering intoxication.
(It is so sweet, so disorienting)
Her skin, the lightest tonal pink,
is only there to manipulate my eyes.
That blood of hers, as black and suspicious
as the first signs of Gothic architecture, is unnaturally calm.
She has reckless thighs wrapped in tattered denim, in time itself;
why has she gone this far?
(You are not there)
Her bones, the palest brown, grow vain
as she seeks to renew what she once had.
Ankles becoming erratic, she stumbles through a neon haze of velvet
into the beauty of another time.
(Do not touch her, she is drier than sand)
Her delusional bare feet
enter
the iridescent aqua bath,
stepping over eloquently designed roman tiles.
(They are impassioned red and aged white)
(They are just like you see in old period cinema)
She is immersed, in sharp tones, and at peace.

When she rises from the bath, she is anchored in reality
by the white lace around her body.
With pupils of dried blood, she retreats,
but she does not waver from the gaze that we share.
She steps out of the pale warm light,
(How can a day seem so perfect?)
her calculated steps retreat into the purple shadows
where she will wait.
Obscured by the thin patchwork of grapevines,
I am left to choose what is next.

Through those very layers lies that which I seek,
and the reality of the situation couldn’t seem more distant.
(You are not there)
(It did not happen)
(She is not there)
(She is a caricature)
(She is myth)
And yet, she breathes.
©2005-2009 ~Bryianzum
:iconbryianzum:

Author's Comments

did the painting for this piece, which has been long in the works. I actually wrote this piece probably about five or six months ago, but wanted to wait to have a painting to accompany, because it felt like the kind of piece that needed a painting to go with it. There's a whole lot of allegories in this, if you can follow. If not, I suppose you can ask me and I can sort of nudge you along. A large portion of this piece came from what I know about women, specifically the women I've dated in the past. Another large portion came from my desire to tell a kind of story using a lot of strange sounding colors for imagery. Anyway, without further ado, here it is. Enjoy.

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:iconcageybutterfly:
Alright...A pleasure to read...I have asome critique;)...But I'd prefer to take you up on the offer of yours to "nudge me along" a bit first...So I feel I have a btter grap of the material:nod:

:hug: Good to see your shit again man:hug:

:blowkiss::heart::thanks::):hug:

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*CageyButterfly absolutely adores self-congratulatory people.
They're so easy to please...

:nod::heart: [link]
VIVE LA:strip: REVOLUTION:salute::!:
:iconc-e-r-i-d-w-e-n:
WOW WOW WOW ... i dont know if i grasped 'your' concept of the meaning.. but i sure as hell conjured up one of muh own..
dare i share?
She is so dangerously beautiful, do u wish to hide her from the rest of the world? you tell her tale so eloquantly, and portray her in many ways.. she is out of reach, but so tempting, u MUST try to get through.
A picture u have painted, that has perfect flaws of truth..
she is ure weakness!!

How did i do???? was i waaay off?
:iconkazellmulynn:
It didn't take me six months to do it.. it took me about a month and a half to get around to it... I read the thing through about a million times trying to get colours out of it... still good after the millionth time ;)

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:butterflytwo: Fliegen Motten in das Licht, genau wie du und ich :butterflytwo:
:iconbryianzum:
I think that she is mankind's weakness, and she is the form of the perfect woman. A man can go his entire life searching and never find the one, yet others can find the one they think to be perfect once a year. There's a lot more too it, but I won't reveal it unless someone asks, and if they do, I'd prefer to wait a bit on revealing it because I'd rather it be a surprise. Thank you for the favorite. :D

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It's in the human DNA to feel sorrow in the search for the right Words.
:iconbryianzum:
Take a look above at my response to Ceridwen's comment, that should give you a start. If you need more, just let me know. :D

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It's in the human DNA to feel sorrow in the search for the right Words.
:iconthemorosecherub:
I absolutely love this entire piece. The imagery is so rich you find yourself surounded by it rather than examining it. The combonation of beutiful and raw imagery alike is great. I almost want to say its appealing because of the contrast, but it all conves a similaar message, and really, in a similar way, just different word pictures, so Im not sure contrast is the right word. In any event, a beautiful piece of both the lovable and the deplorably lovable. Well done.
:iconcageybutterfly:
Oh, well very clever strong writing then...(Not sure if the repitition of "they's" near the end of the first stanza really work:confused: )But I do think this is more a narcissitic "love" for the narrating "mankind";) than anything else...Not for nothing~ but it very age appropriate for a man your age to think in terms of "The RIGHT woman FOR HIM", rather than being the right man, in the contextual reality of a relationship...This poem isn't about her, really..."She's" a projected manifest/mirage of a collected rather onanistic ideals, if I may;)...She is not a "temptress" afterall to one who is not "tempted":shrug:

She ISN'T real yet, because deep down...He really doesn't want to allow her to be, or it's just too early to tell...None of thi9s detracts from the clever signature style of yur work her however..I applaud that:clap::clap::clap::)

:blowkiss:

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*CageyButterfly absolutely adores self-congratulatory people.
They're so easy to please...

:nod::heart: [link]
VIVE LA:strip: REVOLUTION:salute::!:
:iconbryianzum:
Well this wasn't really written from my direct perspective. At the time I wrote it I was starting off a promising relationship that is still going strong today. I tried to think of it in context of the passage of time, of how man's temptations have changed, but for every time there is a form of woman that appeals to every man. The big thing here in this poem is how one goes about pinning down this woman. If you look closely, there's also a large basis in astrology for this poem. I suppose it's my statement that love is cosmic. Anyway, glad you enjoyed it. :D

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It's in the human DNA to feel sorrow in the search for the right Words.
:iconbryianzum:
Thank you, sir. I'm wondering if you also saw what CageyButterfly says she saw in her comments? I think she has an interesting interpretation. The eloquence of your comments is always appreciated.

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It's in the human DNA to feel sorrow in the search for the right Words.

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